Analysis of student writing 5


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Merrick’s mother loved books and she passed it to her son. Once she went to a parade of the zoo, she had been almost crushed her head by an elephant. After that happening she borned Merrick. Merrick’s disease was found and started to expand when he was 2 years old, and gradually his face is going to be different and he had to give up to play with other children. His mother died when he was only 10 years old. After his mother’s death, his father remarried, and the stepmother was not nice to Merrick and she always sneered at him, and his father also had a bad attitude since the remarriage. And when he was 20 years old, she kicked off him of his home. He had no way to earn because of his appearance, so he sold himself to freak show. [General analysis]